What do you think of my story?????? I just started it. If you want to read more please say so!!!!?

One gloomy day, Alexis, who is fifteen, and Taylor, who is sixteen, went to see a Broadway show(Taylor's parents had the tickets but they were out of town. So Taylor decided to invite Alexis.) After Taylor had picked up Alexis from her house in a cab, they started the long ride up to Los Angeles." I am really excited about this. It was really nice of your parents to give them to us," exclaimed Alexis. " I am excited to go with you," said Taylor. When they reached the theater the show was about to start. Finally they settled into their seats.Then the curtains came up. At the intermission, the went to get a coffe. " After the show, you can come and meet the cast if you would like to," said the cashier. " That would be fun. Lets do it!" said Alexis. Taylor agreed with her. After the show, Alexis and Taylor waited in the lobby for the longest time ever. And the odd thing was that no one esle was there. Then all of the sudden the two teenagers were knocked out.

What do you think of my story?????? I just started it. If you want to read more please say so!!!!?comedy show

It is a good start, but it sounds more like a short story. Hopefully, you will go back and edit for paragraphs and spelling.

You have a great idea so go with it. Just remember that "War and Peace" wasn't written after the first editing of it.

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it sounds interesting, but way to corny. And you have to describe the day better. add metaphores and similies.
well girl that is good now
now i want to hear more
I like it, its pretty good. but is this just a brief summary of the beginning of your story? When writing novels make sure you don't spoon out all the information at once, make it a mystery so it draws the reader in saying, "really, i want to know more"
its okay i want to read more sound interesting
Woah, that was pretty good! I'm writing a story to, if you would like to Email me at Illinois_Heart@Yahoo.Com, and we can trade book chapters!